I really like ur line work, and I enjoy this story and like how your playing with different angles, I cant wait to see it all done.
Yesss, I love the handlebar mustache! :D In my opinion, play up the raccoon attack, make it as rabid and seemingly life-threatening as you can. But anyway, great job so far, it looks awesome!
WOWZERS! these are SO great. You have made this shortened piece of the original alive and exciting to watch frame to frame. I enjoy all of the different angles and dramatic anticipation happening throughout these drawings. GO GO GO!
One word of caution....don't stiffen up when you clean up the drawings, keep it feeling loose and dramatic. :D
These look really great so far! I suppose the only thing I could say is that there are a lot of straight-on shots and a lot of profile shots but not much beyond that. I realize it's not a large area you are covering but a few more variations in angles would be sweet, like what you did in the first shot of the fight. Or maybe focus a little less on the characters in a frame or two? Like, show the shadows of the animals fighting all cool and dramatic instead of just the animals? I don't know, just some ideas. :) Looks awesome though!
I think your storyboard is pretty nice. Although it is rough, viewers can still figure out what is going on for most of it. I would suggest you to make the animals clear. It is a little bit difficult to tell what kind of animals they are. You have some close up shots which I think are very nice to have and they indicates some atmosphere. I feel warm when I keeping reading.
I agree with monica and keep the line work and little loose when you finallize it and make the racoon seem more agressive, I like the angles add more of those, other then that i think it good
Good progress! Don't worry about drawing arrows--you can add the actual action later in the animatic. But watch the A/B screen positions. Look at these resources:http://www.animationmeat.com/notes/televisionanimation/televisionanimation.html(Storyboarding the Simpson's Way)http://purgetheory.blogspot.com/2012/03/storydesign-notes.htmlAnd always include the outline for the screen...